
Colleen’s challenge this week is to take a favourite form and tweak it into something new. I have long loved Edgar Allan Poe’s use of Trochaic octameter with its eight trochaic metrical feet. In my piece I have replaced the trochaic feet with simple syllables. I have kept some “DUM da DUM da DUM da” stresses, but have let the beat be driven by the words and the eight syllable form. I have also made this an eight line form.
when at times we do not trouble
we complacent tend to stumble
into apathetic bubbles
the world around us we ignore
unaware of what lies in store
till too late like midnight raven
the world we face – leaving haven
to find the old world – “nevermore”
Padre
very well done, I loved it!
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thank you
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Padre, your Octa-Octa has a great rhythm. I like the 8 syllables and the eight lines. It compliments your words. A wonderful nod to Poe, as well. ❤
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Love this so much 💜
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Gosh – I really like your theme, Padre and what a fine form!
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The rhythm is stunning! Beautifully done, Padre!
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Poe’s poems are great! I like your poem’s rhythm.
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